The line graph illustrates the operation of the stolen cars for every 1000 in Canada, Great Britian, France and Sweden in nine years between 1990 to 1999.
The line graph provides information on the number of car thieves per 1000 in four different countries
from
1990 and 1999.
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Overall
, the number of cases in England was the most serious as it remained at the top within nine years. While
the number of car thieves in Sweden rose gradually from the lowest point, that in France and Canada did not undergo a big change and remained low.
Focusing on the first four years, Great Britain had approximately 18 cases of car crime in 1990, which created a great disparity with other countries. Although
Sweden had the lowest cases at 6, the trend then
overtook that of France and Canada at around 8 after a year. Subsequently
, the latter had a similar starting point at 7 to 8 which gradually decreased during the first period.
Moving on to the remaining years, stealing vehicles was still prevalent in Great Britain which resulted in a slight drop of 2 thieves per a
thousand cars. Correct article usage
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While
the situation in Sweden was
worsened and continued to increase sharply to 13, the other two slightly fluctuated and reached the same point at 5 in 1999.Unnecessary verb
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