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Advertising is becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative development?

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In modern
society
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, it is very easy for people to find
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advertisement
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advertisements
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. Human beings live a daily life flooded with the promotions of
products
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 or services
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everywhere. It has several points of positive and negative developments.
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, I will illustrate what those are. Recently, it has been common that
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companies
create
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to create
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 profit
promoting
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by promoting
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 their
products
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 or services via TV
program
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programs
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, YouTube and other social network services.
In
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 the perspective of the companies, they can show their new
products
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 to the public.
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, if they were
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 image to people, it would be able to change the consciousness of people towards them positively.
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, many
of
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individuals are using
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advertisement
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advertisements
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 not only to give
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information but
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 to promote themselves.
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, a lot of famous online teachers utilize online
banner
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banners
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 to show their lectures, which can be earnings for them.
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, by advertising something,
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society
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 can expect revitalization of the consumer market and
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 it can bring activation in
labour
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 market.
On the other hand
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, advertisements often bring
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adverse impacts on
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society
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. Reckless promotion can make
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a negative
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 image to the public. It can contribute to
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the distrustfulness
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to
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of
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 the consumers and it leads to
lose
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loss
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the
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 companies' trust.
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, it can cause
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 increase
of
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 the price of the
products
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 and the marketers can be eliminated in the end. In the worst case, the
society
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 can be formed with unproven data. In conclusion,
advertisement
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 has positive and negative impacts too.
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, excessive promotion should be regulated to maximise the effect of the
advertisement
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote
  • economic growth
  • provide information
  • awareness
  • job opportunities
  • manipulative
  • misleading
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • invade
  • personal space
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