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In some countries, it is illegal for companies to reject job applicants for their age. Is this a positive or negative development?

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The bar
chart
 and pie
chart
 provide information about the proportion of citizens regarding education level based on
age
 and gender in Glasgow Scotland for the year 2010. From the bar
chart
, we can see that
people
 who attained
university
 degrees recognized a decreasing trend with a growing
age
, in which
people
 from the
age
 group of 24 to 35 received the highest proportion of obtaining a
university
 degree at 76%. A similar trend can be seen for the attainment of school certificates, only 3% of
such
 certifications were contributed by citizens aged 75 and above,
whereas
 individuals of other
age
 groups achieved from 15% to 20% in 2020.
In contrast
, only 9% of residents from
age
 sectors aged below 50 had no qualifications
whereas
 the figure saw a dramatic increase of 30% and 72% respectively for
people
 aged between 50 and 75 and above. From the pie
chart
, we can see that both gender types received an equal percentage of 33% of citizens with school certificates,
whereas
 women with no qualification was a mere 3% higher than
that
Correct determiner usage
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men.
Moreover
, 29% of women and 32% of men obtained a degree from
university
.
Overall
,
people
 aged between 24 and 35 recognized the highest percentage of receiving a
university
 degree and that they
are
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 more likely to be men.
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