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Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages four tourists who visit such places?

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is often assume
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 that some people would like to try new things ,
visit
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and visit
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a
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new
places
 even if
this
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these
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places
a
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are a
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little bit hard or dangerous.
Nawadys
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Nowadays
 many tourists are
become
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becoming
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 more
intersting
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interesting
 in these
places
such
 as
Sahara
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the Sahara
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 desert or the Antarctic . In
this
essay
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 I will tell you
in my opinion
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, in my opinion,
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 what are the advantages and disadvantages of being in
such
a locations
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locations
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 like Sahara .
Firstly
 one of the benefits of visiting these
places
 is having a new and unique experience , an experience that probably you never had .
Moreover
 ,going to these spots will definitely provide you
the
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oppertinuty
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opportunity
 to discover the culture of the country and
also
 a chance to meet the people of
this
 country not only
this
 but
also
 being in
such
a
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apply
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difficult conditions will give you
a
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apply
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differnt
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different
 lessons . In another hand of course there are some
disadvanteges
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disadvantages
 of visiting these
places
 , many of these locations are
dengerous
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dangerous
 it could cause
a
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serious injury
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, for example,
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for example
 many tourists have
die
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died
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 when
thay
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they
 try to live in
Saudi
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the Saudi
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 desert for a couple of days .In
conclusion
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visitng
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visiting
 these
places
 are really
intersting
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interesting
 idea
however
 anyone who
want
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wants
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 to try should be careful and aware of everything.
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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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