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The bar charts below describe the weekly hours worked by people in four Scandinavian countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below describe the weekly hours worked by people in four Scandinavian countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the graph provides reveals the total
hours
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 that employees spent in a
week
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 in four Scandinavian states which are France, Denmark, Sweden, and the UK in 2002.
Overall
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, it is evident that more than 50% of people in all Scandinavian countries worked in the
range
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 of 35 to 40
hours
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 a
week
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.
To begin
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 with, people who worked 1 to 14
hours
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 was the least proportion in the four states nearly 10%,
while
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 labourers who spent time in the
range
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 of 31-35
hours
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 weekly in France had the highest value among the other countries at 50%.
In addition
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, the percentage of employees in France and Sweden who worked in the
range
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 of 15 to 30
hours
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 almost double that of societies who worked in the UK and Denmark were at 15% and 20%, respectively.
On the other hand
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, Sweden had the highest value for people who worked in the
range
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 of 36-40
hours
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 compared to other states in a
week
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 at 80%,
whereas
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 in other regions were at 50%, 35%, and 70%, respectively.
Moreover
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, the total of employees who worked in the
range
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 of 41 to 50
hours
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 weekly was just below 30% in all Scandinavian regions.
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, societies in the UK who worked above 50
hours
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 per
week
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 twice rather than other countries which were at 20%.
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