Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss these both views and give your own opinion.

There are different opinions about accepting a bad situation. Some
people
believe it is better to accept bad
situations
like
shortage
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of money or
a
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an
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unsatisfactory job but others say it is better to try and improve. I will discuss both views and give my own opinion in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, all
situations
do not depend on us. Some bad
situations
like breaking out a war do not depend on one person and a person has no impact on
whole
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war by himself or herself. So, if you are in a bad situation right now, do not blame yourself for everything because you are not the only  factor which can affect the situation.
In addition
, acceptance helps us to remain in our
comfort
zone
.
Comfort
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zone
helps us not to deal with unpredictable
situations
.
People
who stay in their
comfort
zone
and do not try to tackle have better mental health,
whereas
most
people
who are against
this
idea suffer from diseases because of
stress
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the stress
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of tackling new positions.
However
, I think these are just causes because in all
situations
,even a war, a person has a great impact on the story. There is no difference
that
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whether
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he or she is a soldier or a chief.
Also
,
comfort
zone
do
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does
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not help us to make progress because progress is a result of dealing with new things.
On the other hand
, being
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is not a feature of humans. Because we as humans have
effect
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an effect
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on our lives. When you read the books of successful
people
's lives, you will realize that they always try to change the things which are not
according to
their desire.
Moreover
, the well-being of today's world is a result of trying to change bad
situations
. If
people
had accepted
the
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life and
was
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were
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not trying to change, we would not have our today's welfare and facilities. So, if you want more welfare compared to your today's life, you must solve the problems which bother you right now. In conclusion, I think we have to try for improving
bad
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situations
which
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we have in our lives because indifference is not
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a humans'
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humans'
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humans
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characteristic and more welfare depends on our try
for
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to
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improvement of bad
situations
.
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  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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