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The table provides information the reasons of people using the car in city, and the pie chart shows the percentage of transport namely car, LRT(Light Rail Transit), bus and taxi.

The table provides information the reasons of people using the car in city, and the pie chart shows the percentage of transport namely car, LRT(Light Rail Transit), bus and taxi.
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The table provides information
the
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about the
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 reasons
of
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apply
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people
using
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use
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the
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apply
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car
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 in
city
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the city
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, and the pie chart shows the percentage of transport namely
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car
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cars
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, LRT(Light Rail Transit),
bus
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buses
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 and
taxi
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taxis
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. As is shown by the table
that
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apply
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travel to work
illustrate
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illustrates
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the
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a
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 higher value in comparison with shopping and leisure activities.
In addition
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, talking children to school and business demonstrate approximately
same
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the same
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 levels. It is seen from the pie chart that the rate of
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car
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the car
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 is much more compared with the bus and the taxi. As regards the travel to work, which represented just over one half per cent.
By contrast
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, using the
car
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 for shopping and leisure activities stood at the same percentage( 15%).
Furthermore
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, the figures for business and taking children to school were 45% and 40% respectively.
While
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 the using of
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car
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cars
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 accounted for close to
one half
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one-half
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, the proportion was slightly lower, at just over
one third
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one-third
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.
Moreover
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, the bus and taxi presented the same levels. (10 per cent)

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban mobility
  • societal inclination
  • personal space
  • scheduling freedom
  • cost-efficiency
  • public transport systems
  • convenience
  • time-efficiency
  • environmental considerations
  • sustainable urban planning
  • mobility challenges
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