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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Atlantic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places.

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Nowadays, many people are becoming passionate about visiting some
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bizarre
 places with tough conditions and tourists are choosing them as their final destination
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 deserts or the Atlantic. There are a plethora of positive and negative aspects to
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, in my view, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages, and in
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 is that tourists are not fully aware of the weather and
acccommodation
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accommodation
 conditions. What I mean is, these places are regarded as modern tourist attractions which may not contain adequate data or information. The Atlantic,
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, has become one of the most challenging
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 that many visitors have
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 of taking a trip to there.
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 the exotic and hazardous circumstances and the problems
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 may pose, tourists ought to think
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 destination chose over and consider more details aspects. The second
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demerit
 is that they may destroy the unique environment of that region which has existed for a long time peacefully.
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, vanishing the habitat of thousands of creatures and demolishing the pure
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vegetation
 which can be the result of
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human activities in that area. Throwing waste and
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 away is a good illustration of
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 in which people could kill flora and
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fauna
spontanously
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spontaneously
 by contaminating that region.
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, the main advantage of
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 is capturing pictures and videos of unknown places which can be once in a lifetime experience for every traveler.
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, they can reveal
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 advanced information and report many of their experiences on their public vlogs on different social platforms
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, and Facebook. Other enthusiasts of
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,
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, would read it and make wise decisions about their next plan. In conclusion,
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 there might be some positive aspects of it,
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overall
 I believe the drawbacks
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outweigh
 the benefits based on what was mentioned in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • exploration
  • uncharted territories
  • environmental awareness
  • preservation
  • ecosystems
  • fragility
  • eco-friendly practices
  • physical challenges
  • mental resilience
  • environmental degradation
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • wildlife disturbances
  • cultural erosion
  • social issues
  • economic strain
  • safety risks
  • infrastructure
  • medical facilities
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