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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that some
people
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 believe the essential subject in school is
History
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, meanwhile, other
people
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 say the crucial
subjects
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 are
technology
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 and
science
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.
This
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 essay will examine both views.
To begin
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 with, every
country
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 in
this
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 world has its own
history
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, and from it, we learn many things,
such
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 as wars, kingdoms, trades, slavery, and many more. In Indonesia, we had a long story to get our
freedom
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.
Furthermore
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, the Indonesian government made a curriculum with some core
subjects
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, and
one
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 of the important
subjects
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 is
history
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. The aim was to tell
people
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, especially students, how Indonesia gets
freedom
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 and to grow nationalism in pupils' souls.
For example
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, in
history
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 books, they tell the founders, the heroes, places, dates, and how the story was.
One
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 person did not reach
freedom
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, but every
people
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 in
this
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country
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 contributed to getting it.
As a result
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,
history
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 is important and Indonesian citizens knew how the
country
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 got
freedom
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 and grew nationalism.
However
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, in the globalization era,
technology
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 and
science
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 are developing. Public ease to access any information around the world. Netizens can get up-to-date news from their phones everywhere and anywhere.
Technology
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 helps
people
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 to work, ago 5
people
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 handled
one
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 job, but now
one
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 job is handled by
one
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 person.
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 encourages a
country
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 to put it into the curriculum since these
subjects
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 are crucial for humanity's future. These
subjects
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 aim to lead the students to become part of society and let them make human life improve.
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, medicine is improving. Before many
people
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 died because of influenza but over time, scientists found a vaccine, and nowadays, the flu is becoming a common illness.
Moreover
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, a
country
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 has some wishes that the young generation will make some invented and bring a solution to the
country
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's problem,
history
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 is not important because it was the past and now we are in the present and need to be ready for the future.
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, many benefits from
technology
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 and
science
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 will help
people
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 to live better.
To conclude
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,
history
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 is an important subject because, from it, we know where we came from and what happened in the past, so we know the story, we can learn from our mistakes, and we are able to give respect to our heroes.
Science
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 and
technology
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 are
also
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 essential; from these
subjects
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, our knowledge is broadened, and we will get answers to many problems we face.
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