The chart below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The chart below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six  areas of the world.
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The given pie chart illustrates the
water
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consumption
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ratio on three aims of six different regions in the world.
Overall
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, the region of Central Asia is the most dominant agricultural
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consumer,
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however
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Europe
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is the leader
of
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the
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water
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consumption
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for Industrial purposes. Many areas
use
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water
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mostly for
cultivative
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cultivation
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activities
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as Central Asia, Africa, Sout East Asia and South
America
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, with 88%, 84%, 81% and 71%, respectively.
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, whilst its all counterparts
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only less than %10
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for domestic issues, South
America
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has the biggest ratio of domestic
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consumption
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with 19%. The remaining two
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territories
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, North
America
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and
Europe
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use
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their around
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half of
water
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resources
on
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industrial activities.
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Europe
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's industrial
use
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is 53%, North
America
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's industrial
consume
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is less
5
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% than
Europe
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. These companies placed second (
Europe
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) and third places (North
America
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) for domestic usage after South
America
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which is the leader
for
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domestic
water
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consumption
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, europe, use, america with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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