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The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
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The given line chart illustrates the
amounth
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amount
 of three popular fast food consumption in the United Kingdom between 1975 and 1990.
Overall
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,
fish
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 and
chips
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 showed the most significant increase over time whilst
pizza
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 lost its popularity compared to its counterparts in 1990. Hamburger and
Fish
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 &
Chips
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 consumption amount per
week
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 inclined in the period of twenty years. Both meals consumed below 100
grams
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 a
week
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 in 1970,
however
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,
fish
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 and
chips
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 rose exponentially to a half kilograms per
week
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 from 1970 to 1990,
moreover
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,
fish
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 and
chips
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 replaced
pizza
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was
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as
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 the highest consumed fast food type in 1984. Hamburger,
on the other hand
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, slightly inclined to around 120
grams
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 in 1985, before it rocketed to just below 300
grams
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 a
week
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 in 1990.
Pizza
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 was the only meal that declined over time and lost its dominance.
Pizza
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 consumption started at
rougly
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roughly
 300
grams
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 per
week
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 in 1970, it dropped steadily to around 200
grams
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 a
week
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 in 1985. Five years later it increased slightly, but
generally
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pizza
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 followed a downward trend between 1970 and 1990.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, chips, pizza, week, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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