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The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of money
spend
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spent
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 by consumers on cell
phone
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phones
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 and residential
services
 over 10
year
 period. The data has been provided by
United
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the United
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 States Bureau of Labor Statistics and units are given in dollars.
Overall
, cell phone
services
 have become the most popular by 2010 with the money spent each
year
while
the
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apply
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residential phone
services
 have shown decreasing trend though they were preferred by Americans in the
year
 2001. With regard to the
services
 provided in the residential area, it is visible that they have gained popularity over the years. The average expenditure on
this
 service started from $ 200 with a slight increase to $300 and almost doubled in the
year
 2007.
Then
, it continued to rise reaching the highest
spend
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 of above $ 700
at the end
 of the period.
On the contrary
, the
services
 provided in the residential area were the most popular
initially
 but declined dramatically until 2010. The customer used to spend almost $ 700 on average in 2001 with
continuous
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 drop under $600 in five
year
 period and falling
further
 by arriving at the lowest amount of $400 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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