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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
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 line graph illustrates the
carbon
dioxide
emissions
 made by people living in different countries (United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal) over forty year period. Units are given as
carbon
dioxide
emissions
 in metric
tonnes
.
Overall
 it is evident that
,
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the
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carbon
dioxide
emissions
 have decreased significantly in
United
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 Kingdom and Portugal
whereas
 these
emissions
 show an upward trend in Italy and Portugal till 2007.
Further
, it can be inferred that the British people released the highest level of
emissions
 into the atmosphere at the beginning but reduced considerably
around
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 9 metric
tonnes
 until 2007. People living in Sweden emitted approximately 9 metric
tonnes
 of
carbon
dioxide
 with
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 increase in 10
years
 reaching above 10 metric
tonnes
 and
then
 dramatically decreasing below 6 metric
tonnes
at the end
 of
period
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the period
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.
Although
 the release of pollutants into
air
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were
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 quite low by Italian and Portuguese
initially
but
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it has increased steadily over the
years
. The
carbon
dioxide
 levels in Sweden started
around
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at around
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 4 million
tonne
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 and rose above 7 million
tonnes
 in 30
years
.
Then
, it remained unchanged for
next
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 10
years
.
Similarly
, the
emissions
 in Portugal were the least (less than 2 metric
tonne
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) as compared to all the countries mentioned but rose rapidly to 5 metric
tonnes
 in 1997. In subsequent
years
, the emission levelled off in
this
 country.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, emissions, tonnes, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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