In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Since the industrial revolution happened, the cultivation industry faced many progresses both in
quality
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and quantity of its
products
. Despite these improvements,
still
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many countries all around the globe are suffering from starvation. In
this
essay, I will discuss some of the reasons behind
this
issue and
also
suggest possible solutions to encounter it.
To begin
with, there are countless
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yields all around the world. Most of them
utilizing
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new methods and technologies in order to mass produce their
products
.
However
, for some
reasons
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, there is a shortage of
food
supply globally.
Firstly
, the accessibility to modern technologies is not disputed equally.
In other words
, many farmers, especially
working
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in underdeveloped and poor countries, still rely on
old
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the old
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traditional way of cultivation which makes their crops highly vulnerable to any problem.
Secondly
,
due to
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the prices of
the
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agriculture
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products
stable, many of the mass producers destroy a large
quantity
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of their crops annually.
For example
, the United States is the
man
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main
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producer of corn in the world.
However
, in order to keep the
demands
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for its crops high globally, they throw tons of
their
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products
into the sea.
Consequently
, there will always be some sort of
shortages
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, especially, in
the
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poor African countries.
Nevertheless
, despite all deficiencies, there is still hope to find solutions to help hungry
peoples
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people
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. First and foremost,
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a global scale, there should be a well-organized
food
supply plan to support all poor societies.
This
approach could start first in the United
Nation’s
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organization
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, and
then
being
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approved as a regulation for all governments to follow the instruction.
In addition
, governments have to increase their supervision
on
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food
prices combined with
allocation
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the allocation
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of
food
subsidy
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in poor areas to make sure everyone could afford enough
meal
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meals
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. In conclusion,
although
there are many improvements in agriculture technologies, still many peoples
due to
an
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inequality in
distribution
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the distribution
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of resources suffer from starvation. To encounter
this
problem, national organizations with the help of the governments could play a crucial role to solve the obstacle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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