The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in a country in two years

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in a country in two years
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The given pie graphs illustrate the proportion of
energy
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production
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from five different
sources
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in a country between 1995 and 2005.
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, gas, petrol and coal were the most significant
energy
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sources
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during the period of 10 years,
although
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petrol lost some of its
production
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amounth
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amount
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over time. Coal was
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the leading
energy
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source by far both 1995 and 2005. The three biggest
energy
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suppliers were coal, petrol and gas in 1995, with 29.80%, 29.27%, and 29.63%, respectively. Both charcoal and gasoline continued their dominance with an increase of around 1% to approximately 30-31% a year in 2005,
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, the percentage of
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production
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from
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reduced by roughly 10 per cent to 19.55% per year.
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, it preserved its rank as the
third biggest
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energy
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provider in the country in 2005. The remaining 10% share was
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by nuclear power(6.40%) and other
sources
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(4.90%) in 1995. Both of the groups, which were Nuclear power and other
sources
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, nearly doubled their size from 1995 to 2005,
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, their
energy
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production
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rates increased
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-10% per year in 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production, sources with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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