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In many countries, recently young single people have been living far from their parents, from the time they began studies or work and until they married. Do you think there are more advantages or disadvantages to this trend?

As it happens in the wild nature young birds have to leave
the
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parent’s
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parents’
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 nests after a period of adaptation. The young generation moves out of their homes to start a new life.
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,
this
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 approach could lead to some unexpected positive and negative developments. On the one hand, there is a large body of opinion that believes in the natural way of living and supports teenagers in their will to start life by themselves.
To begin
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 with, there are some
obvious
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 clear effects of living on your own.
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, people learn what
is a responsibility
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a responsibility is
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 by renting their first apartment or house.
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, sustainability is another excellent skill that young adults could learn from single life. In that case, without adults’
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apply
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support
they
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, they
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 will have to learn how to generate income by working for themselves or for some business.
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, there are some people
that
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who
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 believe that total control is the key to children’s success
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, and
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 without parents’
support
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support,
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 they may get into trouble.
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, a child could quit college for no obvious reason
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, or
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 someone could have
obstructive
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an obstructive
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 influence
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such
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, such
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 as drug dealers or religious sects. I personally agree that the young mind is easily prone to negative authority;
therefore
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, teenagers could
get to
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end up in
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 jail and destroy their reputations forever. All things considered, it is almost impossible to gain control over the child all day long.
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, in order to secure children’s future
parents
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, parents
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 should concentrate on their education
while
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 they are at school.
As a result
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, the young generation would have a better chance of survival in the world.

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content
Plan what you want to say before you write. Make your view clear in the first part and finish with a short view in the end.
content
Give more real and clear examples to back your ideas.
language
Fix grammar and mark. Use full stops, commas in the right places, and not too long sentences.
structure
Make two clear body parts: one for good sides and one for bad sides, and use link words to move from one idea to another.
content
You try to talk about both sides of the topic.
structure
You use On the one hand and On the other hand to show balance.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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