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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
plan
illustrate
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 some proposed changes
on
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industrial
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the industrial
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 area in the town of Norbiton in the following future
plan
. The significant changes to the town will be housing
instead
 of factory. Other developments like a playground, shops, medical centre and school will be added south side of
river
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the river
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 around the housing. Looking at the current
plan
 of an industrial site, we can see eight parts of factories
are
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around the road under the
river
. The second
plan
 shows that there will be expansion with additional rad with
bridge
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a bridge
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 to cross
river
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the river
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 and one part of housing will be located north of
river
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the river
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, and Farmland will move to
east
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the east
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 of
uppon
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upper
river
. Currently, there are no facilities to enjoy life around the factories, but the new shops and medical centre will be available
in
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left
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the left
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 and right
side
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sides
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 of
new
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the new
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 round road in the future. Looking at the east road area, the playground and the school will be built
surround
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of
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by
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 housings.
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