The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selectig and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity for the years 1990 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selectig and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates how many people in England are giving their money to charity, which is shown by percentage and
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range from 18 to above 65
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old. The information is conducted from 1990 to 2010.
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writing will be given the big picture and the details of the information.
Overall
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, the chart is increasing over the
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and hit the peak in the donation from 36 to 50
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old British in 1990. The total number of charities from 1990 is larger than in 2010. To start with, the
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groups with the least amount of donations are from 18 to 25 which was only 5% in 2010.
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, they spent more money in 1990 with a percentage number was 15%. The most spent money is done by
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groups 51-65 in 2010 and 36-50 in 1990 (slightly below 40% and above 40%, respectively). Surprisingly, there was a similar number of donated by
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groups more than 65 and 36-50 in 2010, which was 35%.
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, 26-35
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old British people are on average amount spending between 25% and 30% only.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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