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Creative artist should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas in words pictures music or film in whichever way they wish There should be no government restrictions on what they do To what extent do you agree or disagree with this option

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Nowadays, we can observe a number of different paintings.
However
, some of them do not pass through censorship,politicians and the
government
 ban most part of pictures, kinds of music, films or even winged words. So, there is
one
 statement which says that
government
 should not restrict the creation of creativity and for
artists
 should always be given the freedom to show their ideas. In
this
 essay I will give my own opinion and to what extent I agree or disagree with that statement.
To begin
 with, it is a real fact that the creation of
artists
 from the past and the present has been censored from the public eye. To my mind, the reason for
this
 is that most
artists
 and writer's creativity is based on true facts which can be against
government
 rules. If
artists
 had an opportunity to express their own ideas about our past, present and future, they would change our lifestyle by 180 degrees. When I was in the 8th grade and that was the moment when there was covid 19, I read
one
 article from
one
 writer and saw a lot of pictures about coronavirus. And I noticed
one
 picture where the
government
 takes money from doctors who try to save the life of millions of people. And here you can see sadness and fatigue on the face of the doctor.
However
,
this
 picture was deleted
due to
 an insult to the state.
Nevertheless
,
this
 picture impressed thousands of people to make a decision about increasing the income of doctors and there were some meetings about
this
 issue. So, to prevent
such
 event
government
 does not give the full opportunity for
artists
 to express their minds. In conclusion, I want to say that I totally agree that
artists
 should be given the freedom to illustrate their minds via paintings music etc. In my point of ,view creative
artists
 can bring a huge number of benefits which can open the eyes of the public about real life.
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