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The diagram details the process of making wool. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram details the process of making wool. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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This
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 figure depicts
wool
Use synonyms
 making and use. it is clear from the diagram that we have four steps to make raw yarn.
According to
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 what is shown the farmers and the factories started with sharing to be easy for cleaning and separate the gust stuck on. After cleaning they dry them in the natural air ,not a machine and roll them in the spinning roller to create
wool
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 balls.
Moreover
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, the
wool
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 is used to make tufts of
wool
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 and separate them into small sizes to put them in the storage area and seal them with a ball shape to use in knitting or making clothes and carpets in the factories.
To sum up
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, we could say that making
wool
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 has many steps that lead to a lot of functionality
,
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apply
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 and do not forget the spinning used for recycling the spring and
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that
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which
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 is helpful for the environment.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wool with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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