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There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter x describe the problems x explain how these problems are affecting the public x suggest some changes that could be made

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regard to a problem I encountered when I used
buses
 in District 5. Please let me elaborate on the issue. Two days ago I wanted to go to the city centre for doing some shopping. I wanted at the bus stop for about 45 minutes, but I could not find a bus to take me. At the time, I thought it was a rare issue.
However
 many people started to complain, so I realized that the infrequency of
buses
 had occurred many times, and many people have been struggling with
this
 problem. They said that inconvenient public transport had made many problems for them.
For example
, they had reached their work late and their children could not be on time at school.
As a result
, I decided to write a letter to you in order to grab your attention to the problem I mentioned. I believe the government can remedy
this
 issue by providing the neighbourhood with new
buses
. In
this
 way, residents of
this
 district can use public
buses
 conveniently.
Lastly
, on behalf of the people living in District 5, I would like to thank you for your consideration. Faithfully yours, Amir Ghasemi
Submitted by amirghas92 on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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