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Money offered for post graduate research is limited; as a consequence, some people argue that financial support from the government should only be provided for scientific research rather than research for less useful subjects. Do you agree or disagree?

Of course, to reach a more sophisticated and more developed society, daily inquiries are essential and crucial.
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 any government pays attention to
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 an important issue, it doesn't seem to be enough
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 to support post-graduate
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, good financial donations , sometimes, are allocated to less worthy projects. In
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 essay, we are going to discuss and take into account the pros and cons of
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 weak policy of some dignitaries.
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, a modern community demands an immense amount of routine
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, often done by postgraduate students of any major. Certainly, any
research
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 needs money to be accomplished and lead to useful results. But
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 budget, sometimes, is not sufficient
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 though
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 it may be
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 and remain incomplete. Since the government is in charge of
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the country,
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they must consider it and devote enough money to it.
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, there are many subjects with less gravity, which can be easily ignored. A big fraction of these projects never make any significant contribution to the citizens. These subjects
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 not only squander the treasure but
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 waste the precious time of numerous scholars. Personally, I think
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 politicians should assess all the subjects by some erudite people and eliminate
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 cases. In conclusion, it is so important to make inquiries about different matters. All community needs to promote these efforts. But we must be aware
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 of how to spend the country's income.
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, by allocating a sufficient amount of budget to postgraduate
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, we can expect the realm to advance.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and supports your argument. Organize your thoughts logically throughout the essay.
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Provide specific examples to support your points. This will make your argument stronger and easier for the reader to understand.
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Make your introduction clear and concise. Clearly state your opinion on the topic in the introduction.
structure
You have a clear introduction and conclusion that outline your main points.
content
You raise important issues regarding funding for postgraduate research.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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