some people say history is one of the most important school subjects.other people think that subjects like science and thechnology are more important than history . discuss both these views and give your opinion.

the graph illustrates ten countries which are
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for
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and making electricity in 2014.
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,the highest level of production and consumption was both for
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about 5.398(
billion
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) and 5.322(
billion
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) respectively.
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the lowest rate of generating and
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was for
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,rep (485.1 and 449.5
billion
kwh
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kWh
respectively).
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united states
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the second top with 4.099 for producing and 3.860 for
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utilising
. it can be seen that
russia
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was the only country that almost
maintaned
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maintained
the same level in
this
topic, which means the difference between them was slight.
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this
gap between these two issues was dramatic among
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five countries(japan,
india
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India
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,
canada
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,
france
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and brazil)following that the
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only
country was
germany
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Germany
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.since the rate of electricity production(526.6
billion
kwh
)was
shorte
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shorter
than the number of electricity consumption(582.5
billion
kwh
) in
germany
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in 2014.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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