online shopping will be the closing reason of all shops in cities and towns, do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays shopping is very easy that you do not need to go there physically and buy. You can just order online and get your groceries or clothes by you do steps. You get to pay online using your device and that's it. I totally disagree because
its
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it's

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better to view a product physically than by online services. You don't get to see the exact text of the item you want to buy. Sometimes you get
wrong
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the wrong

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sizes or
wrong
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the wrong

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product which you enquire
then
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

you have
exchange
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to exchange

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or returned which might be
time consuming
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time-consuming

It appears that time consuming is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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. You will have to go by yourself to exchange or wait for the collection. They
is
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are

It appears that the subject pronoun They and the verb is are not in agreement. Consider changing the verb.

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no quality check of yourself. Shopping directly to the shop has
a lots
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a lot
lots

The indefinite article a may not be required with the plural noun lots in this sentence. Consider removing the article, or changing the noun to singular.

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of advantages. You have many choices, when you are buying clothes you get to fit them to make sure that
their
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they

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are the right sizes and they fit nicely compared to online
were
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where

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by
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apply

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you only see the advert of someone wearing it. The choice of choosing different colours, styles and patterns.
On
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In

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my
on
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apply

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observation shops will not close down anytime people want to see what they are buying,
yo
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you

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have a choice not to be in the dark. Choice of going to buy fresh foods or fruits
though
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apply

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online might be convenient and saves money spent. They are people who
loves
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love

The singular verb loves does not appear to agree with the plural subject people. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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going out to shops to window shop and relax.

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