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online shopping will be the closing reason of all shops in cities and towns, do you agree or disagree

#reason #shops #cities #towns
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Nowadays shopping is very easy that you do not need to go there physically and buy. You can just order online and get your groceries or clothes by you do steps. You get to pay online using your device and that's it. I totally disagree because
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 better to view a product physically than by online services. You don't get to see the exact text of the item you want to buy. Sometimes you get
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the wrong
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 sizes or
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the wrong
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 product which you enquire
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 you have
exchange
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to exchange
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 or returned which might be
time consuming
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. You will have to go by yourself to exchange or wait for the collection. They
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 no quality check of yourself. Shopping directly to the shop has
a lots
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 of advantages. You have many choices, when you are buying clothes you get to fit them to make sure that
their
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they
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 are the right sizes and they fit nicely compared to online
were
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where
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by
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you only see the advert of someone wearing it. The choice of choosing different colours, styles and patterns.
On
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 my
on
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observation shops will not close down anytime people want to see what they are buying,
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you
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 have a choice not to be in the dark. Choice of going to buy fresh foods or fruits
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online might be convenient and saves money spent. They are people who
loves
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 going out to shops to window shop and relax.
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