The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The par chart illustrates the opinions of people about
coffee
and tea purchasing and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Overall
,went
to Wrong verb form
going
Add an article
a cafe
the cafe
cafe
for Fix the agreement mistake
cafes
coffee
or tea in Hobart
and Melbourne
was significantly higher and in Sydney
was slightly lower,while
bought
instant Wrong verb form
buying
coffee
fluctuated in all citiesCorrect word choice
apply
although
, bought fresh coffee
had the lowest in Brisbane
.
Went to a cafe for coffee
or tea in the last
4 weeks and noticed that had
Unnecessary verb
apply
each
the highest number just over 63% Correct pronoun usage
apply
percentage
of city residents in Replace the word
percent
Melbourne
and Hobart
while
the low in
Add a missing verb
was in
Sydney
61% proportion,even though was 55% percentage
in Brisbane
and approximately 50% percentage
in Adelaide ,whereas
bought instant coffee
in the last
4 weeks was fluctuating 45% percentage
in Sydney
around 48% percentage
in Melbourne
after that had risen to just over 53% proportion in Brisbane
and Hobart
54% percentage
,then
low to 50% percentage
in Adelaide .
By contrast
,bought fresh coffee
in the last
4 weeks had the lowest in Brisbane
and Adelaide percentage
approximately 34% ,however
rises to just over 38% per cent in Add the comma(s)
,however
Hobart
,and the next rate remained stable at around 42% per cent in Melbourne
and just below Sydney
percentage
44%.Submitted by Zozororo923 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, hobart, melbourne, sydney, brisbane, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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