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It is natural process that animal species such as dinosaurs become extinct. There is no reason for people to prevent this from happening. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#process #species #dinosaurs #reason #people
Due to
 the natural
phenomenal
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 which has
being
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occurred for
long
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 period of
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times
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 some species
has
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 been
eradicating
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 from the earth permanently. Some people argue that there is no point to conserve them. I strongly oppose that argument because
of
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all animals
in
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 the planet help to
the
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maintain biodiversity. It is one of the key
feature
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 of
equilibrium
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 of the world. As same as
human’s
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 intervention over
the
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nature is the main reason for
destroy
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 some
habitat
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habitats
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.
Firstly
,
natural
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the natural
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 environment always
try
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 to maintain
balance
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a balance
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 between their living things.
This
 balance helps to maintain
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the wellbeing
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wellbeing
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well-being
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 of
the
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every aspect. To maintain
this
 harmony lot of natural processes are going on. As
result
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 of
humans
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 interventions these processes are brock down and it leads to
destroy
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destroying
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 some creatures permanently.
Therefore
 to maintain
this
 equilibrium mankind
have
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 a greater responsibility. By using
latest
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 technological advancement they can remake and conserve the creatures who
in
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a
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danger.
For instance
,
population
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the population
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 of the tigers in Sri Lankan
forest
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forests
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 has been significantly decreasing in recent years
due to
 the people’s activity it’s caused
to
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significant problems in
wild life
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wildlife
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. If relevant authorities can increase their population
in
particular
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 region its help to
safety
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the safety
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 of
other living thing
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another living thing
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 even grass and trees.
Secondly
 our activity directly effect
on
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the
existent
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 of some animals
hence
 we cannot stay idle until they
destroying
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. As a dominant species
in
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 the
planet
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 we have
utmost
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 highest responsibility
serve
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 and protect them because other animals have
same
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 rights as humans.
Hence
, we must get strong actions to protect
other
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others
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 as much as possible In
conclusion
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 some creatures are vanishing
due to
 natural reasons. But as
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Humans
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Human
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,Human
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 we have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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 to protect them without any obligations by using our knowledge. Because
of
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all living things help to equilibrium in nature and
also
 our activities are the main reason for
this
extinct
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extinction
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.
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