Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People hold conflicting views about both methods of beneficial studying for
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in school.
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there are benefits of learning
Food
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Science
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in order to make
food
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preparation, I would argue that
students
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should be taught about essential disciplines. It is believed that nutrients in all foods have different vitamins and minerals.
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, fruits and vegetables that naturally are
nutrient rich
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and help people to prevent the disease before it starts to grow up. The school teaches children about
food
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science
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and how to cook correctly, which is
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best way for
students
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to gain
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knowledge
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about cooking and keep their body more healthy.
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, a 45-year-old man in HCM City, who got botulinum poisoning after eating fermented fish sauce, died after hours of healing.
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, if
students
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have a
science
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of
food
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knowledge
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, they will prevent these cases carefully for themself and their
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.
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,
students
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also
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spend their time on useful subjects because of
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core value. It would be more beneficial for them to choose the courses that they have an interest in or they want to explore. When
students
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have a passion for math, it will help them develop their
knowledge
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about logical thinking, analysis but
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creativity,
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and imagination
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.
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, studying history helps
students
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understand obviously the origin,
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root of a nation. If children have a strong awareness of education and skills, they can seek job opportunities easier than someone who is not equipped with
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.
To sum up
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,
although
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some people think that it is more beneficial for
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to study
food
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science
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. I personally believe that essential subjects bring more benefits
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students
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