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Nowadays, the quality of education is very low. some people think that we think that we should encourage our students to evaluate and criticize their teachers; others believe that this would result in a loss of respect of discipline in the classroom. Disscuss both views and give your opinion.

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To raise the quality of school education, some suggest that schoolchildren should be allowed to assess what they learn at school.
However
, others argue that
this
 evaluation might have adverse effects on the relationship between
teachers
 and
students
. In my opinion, we should encourage them to evaluate their
teachers
.
First,
the evaluation
system
 encourages
teachers
 to get more involved in their lessons. When
teachers
 are fully aware of the difficulties that their
students
 have, they will gladly come up with more conducive materials and teaching methods to draw
students
' attention to the lessons.
For instance
, in Korea, at schools, most
students
 with different levels are put
together with
 the same textbooks. Since they have varying intellectual abilities, some may find lessons easier,
while
 others do not,
Hence
, through the evaluation
system
 feedback from the
children
 can allow the teacher to understand the levels, and develop more appropriate and diverse resources.
Consequently
, the
overall
 class mood will be greatly improved. In the meantime,
however
, there is a concern about the immaturity of young
children
. As is known to all,
children
 are devoid of rich experience, standards or ability to distinguish and evaluate others, so they could probably abuse their rights in the
system
, making their feedback unreliable. To specify
this
, some
children
 may use the
system
 in order to make fun of their
teachers
, avoid in-class quizzes or receive less homework from their
teachers
 by leaving unfavourable comments about them.
For
this
 reason, opinions from those immature
children
 can never be reliable enough to apply to raising the quality of education. In summary, as compared above, I believe that giving our
children
 a chance to form their own opinion on what they learn is a vital aspect of quality education,
although
 there are some concerns about the loss of discipline in the classroom.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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