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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table and pie graphs illustrate data on the police
budget
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 flow between 2017 and 2018 in a territory of Britain. The table reveals the different
sources
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 of income, and the pie charts demonstrate the proportion of
budget
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 distribution
on
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in
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 different categories.
Overall
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, the most important money
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sources
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source
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 was
national
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the national
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 government both in 2017, and 2018, and the biggest expenses
was
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were
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 for salaries between 2017 and 2018.
It is clear that
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 the
budget
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 had coming from different
sources
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, and the most significant figures
of
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apply
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total
was
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were
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 provided by
national
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the national
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 government with 175.7 million pounds, and 177.8 million pounds, in 2017, and in 2018, respectively.
On the other hand
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, local taxes were the second-highest income in the period of 2 years.
Although
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 there were other money
sources
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such
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 as grants,
but
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apply
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only one-tenth of the
budget
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created
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was created
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 with those alternatives.
According to
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 the given pie charts, the three main money outcomes were salaries, technology, and
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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. In 2017,
technology
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the technology
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 and buildings proportion was only a quarter of the total outcome, a year later,
this
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 ratio increased to almost one-third of the
budget
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. For 2017 and 2018, the dominant expense was Salaries by far.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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