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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table and pie graphs illustrate data on the police
budget
 flow between 2017 and 2018 in a territory of Britain. The table reveals the different
sources
 of income, and the pie charts demonstrate the proportion of
budget
 distribution
on
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in
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 different categories.
Overall
, the most important money
sources
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source
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 was
national
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the national
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 government both in 2017, and 2018, and the biggest expenses
was
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were
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 for salaries between 2017 and 2018.
It is clear that
 the
budget
 had coming from different
sources
, and the most significant figures
of
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apply
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total
was
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were
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 provided by
national
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the national
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 government with 175.7 million pounds, and 177.8 million pounds, in 2017, and in 2018, respectively.
On the other hand
, local taxes were the second-highest income in the period of 2 years.
Although
 there were other money
sources
such
 as grants,
but
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apply
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only one-tenth of the
budget
created
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was created
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 with those alternatives.
According to
 the given pie charts, the three main money outcomes were salaries, technology, and
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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. In 2017,
technology
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the technology
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 and buildings proportion was only a quarter of the total outcome, a year later,
this
 ratio increased to almost one-third of the
budget
. For 2017 and 2018, the dominant expense was Salaries by far.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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