Even though globalization has some very positive effects, we cant forget its negative effects. What are the disadvantages and advantages of globalization?

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Globalization
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play
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plays

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a significant role in
modern
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the modern

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world. There are many merits of
globalization
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such
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, improve the
countries
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,
provide
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a job
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a job

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job
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for
people
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,
however
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,
also
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globalization
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have
dmertis
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demerits
merits

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including, environmental issues,
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and exploit
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exploit
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workers
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of workers

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. Regarding benefits,
Firstly
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,
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the sperad
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the sperad

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sperad
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spread
of multinational
companies
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can have a positive impact
especially
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,especially

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in developing nations . To illustrate, nowadays, many international
companies
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invest money
on
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in

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poor
countries
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in infrastructure namely, healthcare, education,
energy
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and energy

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sectros
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sectors
sector

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, which can help to fight
dieases
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diseases
disease

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and give the local
people
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access to better education
,
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apply

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and provide electricity.
As a result
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,
this
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investment can help to provide high standards
quality
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of quality

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of
live
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life

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for local
people
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in underdeveloped
countries
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.
Second
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The second
A second

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advantage,
globlization
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globalization
globalisation

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provide
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provides

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jobs opportunity and income for local
people
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.
For example
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,Apple company have many branches in numerous
countries
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worldwide, and it
employ
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employs

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thousands
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ofthousands

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people
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in different fields
such
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as
,
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apply

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marketing,
working
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and working

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in factories for
production
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the production

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of parts of electronic
deveices
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devices

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.
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,
this
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can help to reduce the rate of poverty and crime.
Although
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globalization
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can bring advantages, but
also
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it
have
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has

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number
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a number
the number

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of drawbacks. To
bging
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begin

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with, many international
companies
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work in
field
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of energy which can
leads
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lead

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to negative consequences on the ecosystem.
In other words
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, some multinational
companies
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do not care about the environment .
which
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apply

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they run their factories using fossil
fuel
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fuels

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.
Thus
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this
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these

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factories produce a considerable amount of carbon
foorprint
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footprint

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, which can
leads
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lead

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to air pollution
as well as
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will increase global warming and climate change.
Secondly
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, some international
companies
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exploit children to work under inhuman conditions
such
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as
,
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apply

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long hours of
works
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work

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,
low
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and low

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salaries. In conclusion,
the
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apply

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globilzation
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globalisation

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can have upsides
inclduing
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including

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, enhance the standard of
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people
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people's

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live,
provide
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and provide

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jobs
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job

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opportunities,
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however
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also
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it
have
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has

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downsides
such
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environmental
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as environmental

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issues,
unacceptable
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and unacceptable

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circumstances for employees.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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