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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.

#people #health #future
There is a projection that the average
health
 standard of
people
are
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 likely to be decreased in the future. In my point of view,
human
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 will get healthier than present
due to
the
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difference
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 factors. In
thiks
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this
 essay, I will explain two
majory
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major
 reasons to support my opinion. First of all, Scientists have a significant development
of
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 medicine and
health
care
in
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nowadays. There are many
illness
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 and
disease
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have
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be
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 solved with new
techqiues
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techniques
 and medicines. Meanwhile,
People
 can prevent most
of
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virals and
disease
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 with
vacination
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vaccination
vaccinations
.,
such
 as flu and HPV.
Secondly
, it is an imperative trend that Individuals
are being acknowledge
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 their personal
health
. One of the
mainly
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 reason is that there are many
educations
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 work about personal
health
care
 that
have
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 been done by governments, organization and school.
For instance
,
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advertisements
advertisments
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advertisements
of
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for
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 personal
hygenic
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hygienic
care
 is notable in many
medias
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,
such
 as print, TV and internet.
Moreover
,
people
are being discipline
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on
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healthly
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healthy
life style
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lifestyle
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, they would prefer
healthy
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 diet rather than junk food. And
also
, different activities
such
 as gym room and yoga
class
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 are popular currently. In conclusion, individuals
care
 and supportive medicine will rewrite the standard of
people
's
health
.
Therefore
, I believe that
average
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 number of healthy
people
 will
higher
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 in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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