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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did a regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did a regular physical activity in 2010.
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The bar chart gives information about the males and females of Australia in various
age
 groups who engaged
to
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 physical activity regularly in 2010.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the number of
women
 was always more than
men
 except for the young
age
group
.
Firstly
, the peak of
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the male's
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male's
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male
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 percentage is reached by
men
 in the 15 to 24
group
, which is 52.8%.
Next
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The next
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 groups (25-34) percentage-wise dropped dramatically to 42.2%. The lowest point was hit by
men
 in the 35 to 44
group
 which is 39.5%. After that, the number of males doing physical activity constantly go up steadily
,
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 and finished with 46.7% being almost the
women
's rate. It is reached by the
men
 in
65
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 and over
group
.
On the other hand
,
women
's rate shows some fluctuations in different
age
 groups. Started
being
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47.7%
women
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of women
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 in 15 to 24 ages. Afterwards, it rose slightly to 48.9%
by
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of
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 the
women
 in the 25 to 34
age
group
.
Then
, grew steadily to 53.3%, which is reached by the female in the 45 to 54
age
group
.
Then
 the
percentages
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percentage
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 declined minimally to 53%, but it fell to 47.1% and hit the lowest point of the
female's
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female
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 rate.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, women, men, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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