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some people believe that children should study all subjects at school, while others think they should only study subjects they are good at or find interesting. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #children #study #subjects #school
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There is a growing argument regarding whether to teach
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 at school or to teach only certain
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 they are in fact have
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 I will discuss both views and give my opinion
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 the matter. In the first view, some might argue children must all be taught all
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 in school no matter what they are interested in.
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 gives the
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 the advantage of acquiring a broad knowledge and sometimes it is a base for all the upcoming studies in the future.
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,
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 might grow an
interest
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 in the subject after learning about it in classes.
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 the other hand, others would argue that
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 must only take classes they have
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 more focused on their
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, more convenient for them and saves
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 because it will be fewer school years
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. In my opinion, I think it is mandatory to teach
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 all
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 of
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 because it is
a basic knowledge
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, and it is helpful generally in life both personally and professionally.
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, both views regarding
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 taught based on children’s
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interest
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 or
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the school’s
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 plan have advantages and disadvantages. If
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 studied all
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, they would have a sense of
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 science of certain
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 if
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 study
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only
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subjects
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 they are interested in, they can be more creative and save time and
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 on something worthwhile
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they enjoy.
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 can be
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 researched, and long-time results can be assessed.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • well-rounded education
  • discover their interests and strengths
  • basic understanding
  • interconnected world
  • higher motivation
  • deeper knowledge
  • mental health
  • reducing unnecessary stress
  • boredom
  • balanced approach
  • successful specialization
  • well-informed perspective
  • solid general education
  • freedom to delve deeper
  • specialized future career path
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