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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line chart illustrates the proportion of
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 read by each gender at Burnaby Public Library between 2011 and 2014.
Overall
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, there were different trends between
men
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 and
women
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.
Women
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 were the leader in reading
books
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 in the library
while
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men
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 took second place.
However
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,
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 became the most significant for reading
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at the end
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 of the year 2014. In the beginning, the proportion of
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women
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 read was 5,000
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 and slightly grew to 8,000
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 in 2012. Meanwhile, the total of
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 read by
men
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 was more than 2,000
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 and rose to double (4,000
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) in 2012. In the year 2013, both gender equally shared the same number of
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 approximately 10,000
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. After that, the number of
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 read by
women
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 dropped to 8,000
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 opposite to the number of
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 read by
men
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 which increased to 14,000
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 over one year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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