The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
The map gives information about the landscapes in an industrial area in the
town
of Norbiton and will show the plan which will change developments in the future. From an
overall
perspective, it can be seen that a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from factorized area to
modernized
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zone which will become
the
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area
with
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full of amenities
such
as housing, playground, school , shops and so on. The
town
is lack
of
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modern
building
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and solely factories are constructed recently. The circular
bridge
will be rebuilt
into
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more straightforwardly to transport along the river to both the west and east of the
town
.
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of the
bridge
which
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to
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north-west of the
town
, two new houses and shops will be built. The farmland is going to move aside
due to
a new route in the north of the city. All of the factories will be knocked down in order to instruct a school and a playground which near
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the river. A medical centre
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will be built near the main road for providing a better quality cure method. A similar trend
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the two houses,
school
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will be seen
at the end
of the
bridge
north of the
bridge
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, bridge with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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