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Many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession. What factors may have caused this situation and what in your opinion should be done about it?

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As an introduction, most students do not have a chance to find a desired occupation once they complete their graduation. Several factors can be contributed to
this
 situation, including a high level of competitiveness for certain professions, increase
requirement
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 of higher qualifications and reduction of availability of jobs. Many people nowadays continue with their skill development even after graduation. Currently, some professions demand higher qualifications and postgraduate degrees.
Hence
, most
university
 graduates do not stop learning until they complete postgraduate studies. As an example, many private and government sector companies advertise vacancies for certain job categories with prioritising more skills and knowledge.
Therefore
 it is unlikely to get
such
 kind of employment with a basic degree.
In addition
, currently, the
university
 intake has been on the rise compared to the previous era. So the competition is
also
 on the rising trend.
However
, in my opinion, the government can effectively tackle
this
 matter by several methods.
Firstly
, they can motivate undergraduates to
further
 their studies by implementing advanced training courses and centres.
Thus
, they can continue with their knowledge and skill development
further
.
Secondly
, the authorities can enhance the availability of occupations for degree holders in both local and international platforms by funding private companies and arranging mutual agreements with other countries.
Finally
, a variety of
university
 courses should be promoted by which, they can get a chance at a vast range of job opportunities in the future. In conclusion, our basic degree holders face difficulties in finding suitable employment for their level and type of education.
This
 is because of several reasons
such
 as the increased number of
university
 entrees leading to reduce available careers
as well as
 the high level of competition. Anyhow, we can attend to
this
 matter in various ways to improve their quality, which will be useful in preventing ultimate unemployment and intelligence draining.
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