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Some systems require students to specialise in a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. Other systems require a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of these two education systems and which is better?

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Education systems can vary greatly and
this
 matter often causes heated debates. In
this
 essay I will be covering two different ways to educate: one where
students
 have the freedom to choose a limited amount of subjects they are going to specialise in and another where
pupils
 ought to learn a wide quantity of topics in all of their
school
 years, giving my humble opinion and benefits of these ways to learn. First of all,
school
 is a great place to discover the matters that one can be interested in and turn
it
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them
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 into their future occupation. The system that
give
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gives
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 its
pupils
 the opportunity to narrow the range of subjects from the age of fifteen
offer
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offers
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 them a way of education that has been more customized to their needs and
intrests
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interests
,
this
 benefits the
students
 by deepening
as well as
 strengthening their knowledge and skill in the fields they are the most motivated and
exited
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excited
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 about. Motivated
pupils
 tend to be easier and more pleat to work with for the teachers, making the
school
 and its employees more fulfilled,
not to mention
 possibly attracting more funds for the institution
due to
 the fact that motivated
students
 tend to achieve more in their careers in the future.
Secondly
, schools contribute to widening a young
persons
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person's
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 world view and common knowledge a ton. The educational system that does not allow to choose certain topics to specialize in
help
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helps
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 its
pupils
 to learn information from different fields of life.
This
 gives
students
 the opportunity to develop and choose when their older, which can make their decisions more
though
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thought
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 out and accurate preventing them from dropping out and switching their study matters. All in all, I would say that the choice to get rid of a few topics can be very helpful for most of the youngsters in
school
.
This
 way their knowledge becomes stronger,
they
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and they
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 can practice skills that they will be needing in the future .
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