The chart shows the average life expectancy for males and females in 1900, 1950 and 1990.

The chart shows the average life expectancy for males and females in 1900, 1950 and 1990.
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The given table provides
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information
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avarage
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average
lifespan for different genders in European
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from 1900 to 1990.
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, females had longer life expectancy than
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male counterparts for each year,and all genders' predicted lifespans improved over time. The two
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that had significantly longer life expectancy than others: Denmark, and Sweden, with 51.6, and 52.8 for males; 54.8, and 55.3 for females, respectively. Both
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figures increased moderately to over seventy
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for each gender in 1990.
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Swedish females had the highest-expected lifespan with 80.7
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in 1990.
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remaining three
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life expectancy
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inclined over time, but males from Austria had the least estimation with 37.8
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in 1990, which
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rose by roughly 35
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to 73.5
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in 1990.
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, Germany's and Belgium's estimated figures followed an upward trend over the period of 90
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. They both had relatively close estimations over time.
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