The chart shows the average life expectancy for males and females in 1900, 1950 and 1990.

The chart shows the average life expectancy for males and females in 1900, 1950 and 1990.
The given table provides
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information
of
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avarage
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average
lifespan for different genders in European
countries
from 1900 to 1990.
Overall
, females had longer life expectancy than
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male counterparts for each year,and all genders' predicted lifespans improved over time. The two
countries
that had significantly longer life expectancy than others: Denmark, and Sweden, with 51.6, and 52.8 for males; 54.8, and 55.3 for females, respectively. Both
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figures increased moderately to over seventy
years
for each gender in 1990.
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Swedish females had the highest-expected lifespan with 80.7
years
in 1990.
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remaining three
countries
life expectancy
also
inclined over time, but males from Austria had the least estimation with 37.8
years
in 1990, which
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rose by roughly 35
years
to 73.5
years
in 1990.
On the other hand
, Germany's and Belgium's estimated figures followed an upward trend over the period of 90
years
. They both had relatively close estimations over time.
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