Write about the following topic: In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Poor student behaviour seems to be an increasingly widespread
problem
and I think that modern lifestyles are probably responsible for
this
. In many countries, the birth rate is decreasing so that
families
are smaller with fewer
children
. These
children
are often spoilt, not in terms of love and attention because working parents do not have the time for
this
, but in more material ways. They are allowed to have whatever they want, regardless of price, and to behave as they please.
This
means that the
children
grow up without consideration for others and without any understanding of where their standard of living comes from. When they get to school age they have not learnt any
self control
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or discipline. They have less respect for their teachers and refuse to obey school rules in the way that their parents did. Teachers continually complain about
this
problem
and measures should be taken to combat the situation. But I think the solution to the
problem
lies with the
families
, who need to be more aware of the future consequences of spoiling their
children
. If they could raise them to be considerate of others and to be social, responsible individuals, the whole community would benefit. Perhaps parenting classes are needed to help them to do
this
, and
high quality
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nursery schools could be established that would support
families
more in terms of raising the next generation. The government should fund
this
kind of parental support
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because
this
is no longer a
problem
for individual
families
, but for society as a whole.
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