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Ensuring that children have regular physical exercise should be the responsibility of parents and therefore schools should not waste valuable school time having sports lessons as part of the curriculum.

#children #exercise #responsibility #parents #schools #waste #school #time #sports #lessons #part #curriculum
It is argued that who
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is repsonsible
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repsonsible
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responsible
 to make sure
children
 get enough regular exercise
.
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 Some believe that parents
is
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 responsible for
to ensure
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ensuring
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 that
children
 play
sports
 rather than
schools
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school
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. I totally disagree with the statement, because I think the
school
 have
porfessionals
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professionals
 in
sports
 and
sports
facilities
.
To begin
 with , I think
the
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parents should not
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be resposnible
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resposnible
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responsible
about
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for
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 ensuring that their
children
 do regular exercise.
Partents
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Parents
 already have paid fees to
schools
 to register their
children
schools
.
Therefore
,
school
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schools
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 should make
sports
 lessons obligatory in their curriculum.
Furthermore
, There are
serveral
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several
 reasons why I believe that playing
sports
 should become mandatory
of
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curriculum
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the curriculum
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 of
schools
 in order to make sure students receive adequate exercise .
Firstly
,
schools
 have staff who specialist in teach
children
 how
do
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to do
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exerice
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exercise
 in
correct
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the correct
a correct
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 way and prevent them to get injuries.
Furthermore
, the staff of
school
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the school
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 can provide enough support to encourage students making playing
sports
 more
enjoyment
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 and beneficial .
For example
, the
school
 can launch competitions in football and the team who
winning
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 receive
prize
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a prize
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.
Secondly
, the
school
 have appropriate
facilities
such
 as
swimming
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a swimming
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 pool, playgrounds,
green
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and green
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 spaces.
This
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This facility
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facilities
 can provide
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an attraction
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attraction
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 environment for
children
 to
enagaing
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engaging
 in playing
sports
 and stay healthy .
Furthermore
 ,
school
 via
this
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these
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facilities
 can educate
children
valuable
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on valuable
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 skills, cooperation, teamwork,
competitions
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and competitions
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, which
this
 useful skill for
they
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their
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pofessional
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professional
 and personal life. In conclusion, I totally agree that the
school
 should make playing sport compulsory
of
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 their curriculum,
this
because
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is because
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 the parents have paid for
school
 fees
as well as
school
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a school
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have
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has
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porfessional
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professional
 employees and suitable
sports
facilities
.
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