Ensuring that children have regular physical exercise should be the responsibility of parents and therefore schools should not waste valuable school time having sports lessons as part of the curriculum.

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. I totally disagree with the statement, because I think the
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parents should not
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of
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in order to make sure students receive adequate exercise .
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way and prevent them to get injuries.
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can provide enough support to encourage students making playing
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more
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and beneficial .
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such
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can provide
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environment for
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to
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engaging
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and stay healthy .
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can educate
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their curriculum,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured environment
  • inclination
  • teamwork
  • sportsmanship
  • cooperation
  • academic time
  • intellectual development
  • after-school activities
  • relegated
  • family bond
  • supervised
  • well-being
  • equipment
  • expertise
  • professional physical education teachers
  • safe and beneficial
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