Today's essay topic: *People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.*
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Drugs
could be helpful if we use it
in the right way , Correct pronoun usage
them
however
, it is also
can be very dangerous if people start to use without
medical Correct pronoun usage
them without
obsorvation
. Indeed Correct your spelling
observation
drugs
abuse are Change the noun form
drug
very
serious issue that threat society and it is one of the most and high dangerous Add an article
a very
problem
many countries suffer from and Fix the agreement mistake
problems
also
very old and complicated . It is often assumed that young people start to addicted on
Change preposition
to
drugs
because whether
they Change preposition
of whether
learend
from their parents or the most popular way in my opinion which is the bad friend. we all know that young people spend much time with their Correct your spelling
learned
learnt
friend
which can lead to Fix the agreement mistake
friends
try
illegal Change the verb form
trying
drugs
as fun and just for try in the beging
Correct your spelling
beginning
then
to serious addiction wich
can lead to cause a different disease Correct your spelling
which
relited
to mental health , much less Correct your spelling
related
lose
Replace the word
loss
a
money and job . everyone Correct your spelling
of
are
Change the verb form
is
Correct your spelling
responsible
responsable
to fight youth drug abuse and help the government Correct your spelling
responsible
through
many ways Change preposition
in
like
Change preposition
apply
for example
, report
on drug dealers , In additional Wrong verb form
reporting
government
must build and Add the comma(s)
,government
funding
Wrong verb form
fund
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
rehabliation places
a rehabliation place
rehabliation
places Correct your spelling
rehabilitation
which
the addicted can go and get the right treatment . Correct word choice
where
in
conclusion illegal Correct your spelling
In
drugs
and drugs
dealers will continue to harm our society and we should stand togather
to look outCorrect your spelling
together
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite