Today's essay topic: *People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.*

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Drugs
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in the right way ,
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can be very dangerous if people start to use
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observation
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drugs
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abuse are
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serious issue that threat society and it is one of the most and high dangerous
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many countries suffer from and
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very old and complicated . It is often assumed that young people start to addicted
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drugs
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learned
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from their parents or the most popular way in my opinion which is the bad friend. we all know that young people spend much time with their
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illegal
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as fun and just for try in the
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to serious addiction
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can lead to cause a different disease
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money and job . everyone
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responsible
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on drug dealers , In additional
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rehabilitation
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the addicted can go and get the right treatment .
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conclusion illegal
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dealers will continue to harm our society and we should stand
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together
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • peer pressure
  • glamorize
  • substance abuse
  • preventative measures
  • cognitive function
  • alienation
  • awareness campaigns
  • mental health issues
  • parental supervision
  • social stigma
  • rehabilitation programs
  • early intervention
  • psychoactive substances
  • adolescence
  • decriminalization
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