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Some feel that animal testing is cruel while others feel it is necessity. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion

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Animal testing has been a constant debate all around the world. Some
people
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 say that using
animals
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 for product testing is cruel
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 others are saying the other way around. In my opinion, it is inevitable not to
use
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animals
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 when doing some tests of a new product. There are various reasons why we do animal testing.
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, they are the nearest creatures to us human beings. Scientifically,
animals
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 do have some similarities to
humans
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.
According to
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 Charles Darwin's theory of evolution,
humans
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 are from monkeys that evolved as years
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 by.
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 using monkeys to do some product testing like maybe some new drugs will be reasonable before trying it
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people
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.
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,
animals
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 are considered at the low level of the food chain.
People
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 believe that
animals
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 were created for us
humans
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 to
use
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 or consume.
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, researchers
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 not feel any guilt in using rats to try a certain cosmetic brand as they know that
animals
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 are replaceable and
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 not have a feeling.
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, there will always be drawbacks. One of
it
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 is
the
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animal extinction. The more that we
use
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animals
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 because of our curiosity, the more
animals
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 will die. In every research
laboratories
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, there will always be hundreds of thousands of
animals
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 dying because of our
greadiness
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greediness
readiness
 to know more. Another is that new diseases are accidentally being produced as an effect of animal testing. The recent pandemic which is covid 19 is a result of animal testing being done inside a
laboraty
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laboratory
 and a few
animals
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 escaped
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 spreading the virus. In my opinion, animal testing is very beneficial to us
humans
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 as they are our first line of defence
for
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against
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 new products that are being sold in the market. They are really meant to be
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use
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 and consumed by the
people
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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