The graph below shows the number of trips made by children in one country to travel to and from school in 1990 and 2010 using various modes of transport. Summarise theinformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisonswhere relevant. Travel to and from school by children aged 5-12

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The given column graph illustrates the number of

trips

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made by children in two separate years, which are 1990 and 2010 in a particular country. The vertical axis represents the number of

trips

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per

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million

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per year and the horizontal stands for the different modes of transport like

bus

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car

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, walking, bicycle

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apply

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bus

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and walking together. In 1990, the

trips

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made by

bus

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were dramatically higher than by other modes. About 12

million

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trips

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were made by

bus

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, which was two times more than those made by walking and cycling each, and three times more than those made by

car

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. About 7

million

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trips

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were made by

bus

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and walking together. Two decades later, in 2010,

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apply

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car

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trips

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superseded all other modes and became approximately 12.5

million

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, an increase of 8.5

million

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from the figures of 1990. The

bus

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trips

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decreased to half and became 6

million

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Trips

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made by

bus

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and walking together

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decreased by 1

million

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from the figures of 1990.

Trips

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made on foot

also

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decreased from 6 to 3

million

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and those made by cycling reduced to 2

million

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. On the whole, the column graph shows that

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bus

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the bus

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was the most popular form of transport to go to and from school for children in 1990.

However

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, in 2010, the

car

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became the most popular mode.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words trips, million, bus, car with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

222 words

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