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Some claim that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays there is an argument between
men
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 and
women
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, some people claim that
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 are more competitive as they have strong power and mental stability.
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, all over the world
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 are considered more high-powered than
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.
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, I totally contradict
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 statement, since
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 genders have abilities and should be treated equally. To start with, it is believed by people that, males have the capability to control themselves over emotions and become the first choices in workplaces.
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, it is claimed that
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 can overcome hard tasks that's why, long ago the majority of slaves were
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. It seems sense that
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 are favoured over
women
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 in many professions for these reasons.
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, the gap between
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 genders has greatly reduced in the modern era.
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 and
women
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 perform equal roles in every occupation. To illustrate, numerous businesses today are led by female CEOs, and
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 have some of the highest positions and stature in politics.
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 being told that
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 are naturally kind in all ways, modern society has moved past
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 idea. In order to demonstrate that
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 are just as competitive as
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 in our society of gender equality, many
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 have taken part in competitions that test
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 their physical and mental capabilities.
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, I believe that
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men
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 and
women
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 are capable of performing any task.
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, some situations are better left to males because they are stronger and smarter than
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.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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