Some people think that certain old buidings are more worth preseving than the other ones. Which types of old buidings should be preserved? Do you think that the advantages of preseving these old buildings outweigh the disadvantages?

It is claimed that
people
think that old
buildings
are worth preserving more than others .
While
there are some existing drawbacks , I believe that
this
decision
more
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potenticial
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potential
benefits. On the one hand , It is
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that a significant number of negative impacts could
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. If the old houses are still used in a densely populated place, it can affect the lives of
people
.The biggest damage is caused by fire. Because current temperatures are rising and power outages occur frequently, some old houses are short-circuited, leading to fires. Another
unbenificial
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beneficial
unbeneficial
effect would be that some of the preserved old
buildings
are now degraded and the cost to protect these old
buildings
is very high, many
buildings
that are not in the ancient ruins are still not maintained. Reconstruction permits jeopardize the safety and beauty of the city.
On the other hand
, I would agree that there are more advantageous impacts on
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societies.
Firstly
, a number of historic
buildings
were protected and renovated to become a place of learning and sightseeing for students and visitors.
For example
, Thanh Co Loa is one of the important historical sites of Vietnam that has been restored to become a famous relic for tourists.
Second,
there is an old building located in the old town
that is
currently being used and known worldwide as a famous tourist and check-in destination.
That is
creating many jobs and
bringing
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income for
people
. In conclusion, the
buildings
are too old, so they should be renovated to avoid endangering
people
around . There
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ara
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more likely to have significant positive effects than
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negative
relative
regative
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negative
ones
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