Write about following topic: In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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true
that in many countries, the frequency of
crime
has been
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increased
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recent years. There are
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of possible reasons for
this
, but steps can definitely be taken to tackle the problem. In my opinion,
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of many kinds of
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increasing crimes, crimes from
youth
people are
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part of that. There are some reasons
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caused
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cause
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youth
crime
. one of the reasons is that some
parents
tend to be too lenient
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their
children
. Since they do not have much spare time to regulate their
children
, they just allow their
children
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to do
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whatever they want,
such
as
watch
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movie
which contains violence.
As a result
, their
children
will tend to imitate the same behaviour as the
movie
.
This
will
terriblely
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terribly
affect
children
's mindset
,
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and may cause
children
become
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to become
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more violent and even lead to future
crime
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criminal
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behaviours. The
youth
behaviour can certainly be improved. I believe that the change must start with their
parents
, who need to take much more spare time to accompany their
children
and
also
design
sutiable
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suitable
rules for them.
This
is because,
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compared
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to
children
,
parents
are more mature and they have the ability to
distingrish
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distinguish
which
movie
or game is good for their
children
's mental health,
such
as some movies on history or science. If their
children
watched
those kind
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of
meanful
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mean
movie
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movies
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, they will learn lots of
knowledges
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as well as
obtain much joy from that experience.
Moreover
, to prevent
children
imitate some people with moral problems,
parents
can try to be
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role
model
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to their
children
, by showing their
children
how to be a person with great personalities like friendly and
politely
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.
As a result
, their
children
will follow the same kind of
characterics
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characteristics
like
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as
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their
parents
. In conclusion, the
crime
rate
of
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in
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most countries may continue
incraseing
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increasing
, unless some
youth
parents
start to take their time to better regulate and educate their
children
.
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