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The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.

The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.
the given bar graph illustrates the amount of time spent by teachers at three school levels Primary, lower secondary, and upper secondary in different countries in 2001
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, it can be seen that in the
USA
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 was the highest spent in the number of Upper secondary, Lower secondary, and Primary,
while
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Japan
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 had the lowest.
Iceland
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 and
Spain
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 were particularly the same numbers. The amount of time spent by teachers in the upper secondary in the
USA
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 was just under 1,200,
while
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Iceland
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 and
Spain
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 had 900.
Japan
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 had 200 lower. Lower secondary in the
USA
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 had 1,000,
while
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Spain
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 had about 750.
Iceland
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 and
Japan
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 had approximately 630.  In the
USA
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 teachers were more likely to spend time compared to
Iceland
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,
Spain
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 and
Japan
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. The
USA
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 outnumbered
Japan
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 with 500,
while
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Iceland
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 and
Spain
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 had just below 900.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, japan, iceland, spain with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts, time allocation, primary education, lower secondary level, upper secondary level
  • teacher workload, classroom hours, non-teaching duties
  • educational system, comparative analysis, pedagogic practices
  • instructional time, professional development, teacher's responsibilities
  • discrepancies, workload distribution, teaching hours
  • statistical data, time management, educators, pedagogues
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