In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed. What is your opinion about this?

This
case is simple but we can’t simply
it
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, maybe there is two opposition in
this
case, the
parents
and
teenagers
. the
parents
is
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aggree
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agree
because
this
phenomenon can make
teenagers
avoid danger from out there during
night
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the night
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and
parents
can notice their children and make them safe, the
teenagers
think
this
phenomenon
make
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them not free and feel in jail. I agree with
parents
, because
go
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out at night can make children dangerous.
For
example
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when
teenagers
go out at night and they get robbed by
unknowing
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people or they get
crime
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crimes
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, it will make
they
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them
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dangrous
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dangerous
. So curfew is make them safe
in
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at
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home.
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