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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can present and solve crime Do you agree or disagree?

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The rapid advancement of
technology
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 has a significant impact on various aspects of our lives, including
crime
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 prevention and resolution. I totally agree with the
crime
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 rate
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 declining
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 the adoption of advanced
technology
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, particularly in the form of digital
door
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locks
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.
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, digital
door
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locks
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 offer a significant improvement in biometric information for
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 by using fingerprints and facial recognition, or unique passcodes for access. These intense
security
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 checks make it significantly challenging for unauthorised individuals to disclose these
locks
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.
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, the cameras are not only used for checking and allowing access
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 but
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 connect to house owners to make an allowance or observation by themselves.
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, properties equipped with digital
door
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locks
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 are not easy to break-ins, so it could contribute to a decline in
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crime
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 rates.
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, it is not only the
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 with encryption and authentication programmes of digital
locks
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,
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providing
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alarming and recording capabilities. That would help property owners to get the notification and provide the necessary data for criminal investigations.
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, the criminal records in modern condominiums are significantly lower than
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 apartments.
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locks
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 automatically lock themselves if a suspicious individual attempts to unlock the passcode over the restricted numbers. In conclusion, the utilisation of advanced
technology
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, specifically digital
door
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locks
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, plays a vital role in the decline of
crime
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 rates. By offering individualised recognition techniques with enhanced
security
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 features including alarming and recording. Ultimately, the advantage of
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technology
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 implementation
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 escort individual privacy and
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 which can
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 be a practical tool for preventing and reducing
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crime
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 rates.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surveillance cameras
  • advanced security systems
  • potential criminals
  • law enforcement
  • AI (artificial intelligence)
  • big data analytics
  • forensic science
  • public awareness
  • social media
  • online platforms
  • crime prevention
  • crime rates
  • counterargument
  • cybercrime
  • technological misconduct
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