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Creative artist always be given the freedom to express their own ideas ( in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. there should be no government restriction on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Creativity is the mother of innovation.
Artists
 should be allowed to explicate their personal views in the form of writing, pictures and music or film. There should be no government pressure on
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 of creators.
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 and losses of
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this
 notion.
To begin
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due to
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artists
 present violent materials. To illustrate it, they
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upload
 vulgar pictures on their social
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.
Such
activaties
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activities
 have
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 impact on the minds of
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youngsters
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 negative environments.
Moreover
, if governments allowed them to do what they want , they present some hate speech against their opponents which polarized the public.
For instance
, in
Pakistan
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 a social activist presented some inappropriate pictures
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 a ceremony
due to
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of
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function was disturbed.
Therefore
, higher
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authorities
 should keep
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 on
artists
which
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 materials, they are
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exhibiting
. To commence with, sometimes,
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 them to write or speak in
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favour of the
governments
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 hide the facts. To illustrate it, if analysts are pressurized to
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 in the
interst
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interest
interests
 of stakeholders, it will not only damage
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 creative capacity of them but
also
 make a society which is far away from
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 and dare.
Therefore
, powerful institutions should not fabricate the news by holding
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control
 over
artists
. To put it in a nutshell I pen down saying
artists
 should understand their duties and they should not present unethical and unrealistic
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.
On the other hand
, governments should not force them to express
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their
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interest
 because it
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not only keep secret of
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 of but
also
 reduce
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 innovative abilities of them.

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